Tuesday 26 May 2015

5sc week 6

one day a man was walking throw a forest hoping he would find the key of live. thin suddenly he fall into a hole and thin into a treasure chest 100,000,0000,000 meters deep.but there was a trampoline so he wouldn't die.then he saw a chest made of gold. he carefully opened the chest and couldn't believe it he had found the key of live the held it and became the most powerful man in the universe.
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  1. Anonymous28 May 2015 at 13:32

    Hey Mikael!
    you wrote a great story, it was very entertaining! One thing to work on next time is punctuation. There were a few capital letters missing. Other than that it was a great story! :-)

    Isabelle

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  2. Anonymous28 May 2015 at 13:39

    Hi Mikael!
    Work on using full stops an commas. Apart from that it was a great story! :D

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